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Reading Out Loud:

I already use this technique when I read anything.. It seems to me that I cannot focus without using this technique. Reading out loud really helps catch details that you might miss otherwise. I think many students learn the art of skimming. Sometimes people tend to skim even when they do not mean to. When reading out loud and reading slowly it helps to ensure that no details are missed. I did a technique where I first read the story to myself and then I read it out loud. And I came to notice when I first read it to myself, I had skimmed so much that I got lost in the story. I was not sure who was who, and what was really going on in the stories. For example, by the end of the story I was confused on who the youth was and how the crocodile played a role. I then read it again, and I, then understood the plots of the story. I also realized reading stories out loud help you remember the story, than if you just read it to yourself.

Copy & Paste:

Animals trying to imitate mankind and speak their language - What if that happened in this day in age?

Held festivals to show off their strengths

The animals should also have this type of festival and hold feast.

The whole world was invited to this festival? Really interesting that they are summoned by a drum that everyone can hear.

This is so cute! Each animal playing an instrument of their choice and style.

I like that these animals were able to laugh and play like humans are.

U Kui got a big head and I bet it will end up biting him in the butt.

U Kui is being selfish and does not want to share. I bet if he would of shared his sword people would've admired him more.

That is so awesome how they connected him stealing the sword to thunder. Very creative.

Awh! I hope U Kui get its, and this just made me so sad. I wonder if U Kui's mound will reach the sky?

Those are the notes I got from using the copy and past technique with "What Makes the Lightning."

I can see why the copy and paste technique is so effective. To make a note you have to reflect on what you just read. It does make making comments on someone's post easier and more in depth.

Use a Timer:

I chose to read the story Midterm Madness. I set my timer to 10 minutes. I read it out loud and slowly and I was done reading it within 4 minutes. Then, since I enjoyed reading the story so much I read it again. This time I focused on the message of the story and reelected while I was reading it. It reached to my 10 minutes when I was done. I am not sure how much I enjoyed the timer technique. I feel as if everyone has their own pace in which they read and reflect. A timer could just make some people nervous. In this case it was helpful, but I would of reread the story regardless. 

I think I like the combination of reading out loud and copy and paste. It helps catching every detail. 

Pay Attention to What You Are Reading

(Source: Wikimedia)

Week 4 Storytelling: A Wife's Blues

It all started when my husband John told me that he was getting deployed to Afghanistan. I had no idea how to react. I was hurt and in shock. I mean how could he just leave us? I understand that it is for our county but I do not know what I would do without him! I decided I am just had make the best of it. I spent the next few weeks spending every moment I could with him and our two adorable little girls. However, John wanted his family to have dinner with us twice a week before he left. This includes his brother Adam. Adam has always been so weird. In high school, he would stare at me awkwardly anytime I was around him. Yet, he would never talk to me.

The time passed by too quickly. I dropped John off at the airport with tears in my eyes. I didn't want him to leave but he promised he would be back soon. I kissed him goodbye and off he went. John called me three times every week. He called me on Mondays, Wednesdays, and Fridays. I was so thankful that I was still able to talk to him a few times a week. Things were fine. Everything was fine. And then my world came shattering to pieces. 

In the middle of the night I woke up to a banging on the door. To my surprise, it was John's team members. They told me that John went missing in action and they believed he is dead... I, I, was once again in shock and my heart broke. I cried for days. I could not control myself. The army had arranged a funeral for him, and though I was devastated I still went. His mother, father, and his brother greeted me when I arrived to the funeral. Afterwards, Adam wanted to come over to talk. When he came we had a good conversation reminiscing about John. It was the first time ever that I had a decent conversation with Adam. I decided he wasn't that weird after all. 

For the next few weeks, Adam came over every day. He helped me remodel my kitchen, he helped with the girls, and he took my mind off of my depression. Adam had become a big part of my life. One night, while having a few drinks, Adam and I were reminiscing about high school. He told me he had a crush on me in high school but I fell for John instead. I am not really sure how it happened. But one thing led to another and before I knew it, I was waking up to him the next morning. We were just lying there when we heard banging on the door. I got up and answered the door, and once again it was John's team members. They said that they found John and he would be returning home in a few days.

I did not know what to think. My dear husband who I thought was dead, is now alive? And I just slept with his brother? I had too many mixed emotions...Let's fast forward to when John got back. He was different. Things were different. He suspected that me and Adam had an affair but I reassured him that nothing happened. I felt so guilty but why? I did not cheat. I thought my husband was dead. I started to feel sick every morning and I thought it had something to do with just how weird things were. I went to the doctor and the doctor told me I was pregnant...

Since John had gotten back we had not done anything. I knew it was Adam's. I panicked. That night I did it with John and in the next few days I told him that I was pregnant. I told him that it was his. I know it is stupid but I did not want to lose John. Though, he did not believe me. He wanted me to prove it. Panicking again, I asked one of my friends who is a doctor if she could help me forge the results to the DNA test. And she did...

Fast forward even more... I ended up having twins. But John was still suspicious and did not want to be made a fool. So he left us. Every night I sang the blues. I sang about John and I missed him. I taught these blues to my twins. They sang it perfectly. I would often take the kids to the park and just sit there while they played. I just think how my life could have been different… One day when the twins were singing the blues in the park John came back... I was so happy to see him. But he wanted me to prove my loyalty to him once more.This time... I couldn’t... I just couldn’t live a life like that. So I ran.

I ran and I ran and I ran. I ran until I didn’t know where to go. And that is how I ended up here. I do not know what to do now. I need your advice. I just feel so awful.

(a few moments of silence went by and then...)

The therapist replied, “It will be okay. We will work figure this out together.”

Image Information

Sitting in the Park, Before John Arrived

(Source: Pixabay)

Bibliography:

This story is based on Sita Sings the Blues Reading Guide Part A and B

Author's Notes:

In the original story Rama is exiled and goes to the forest and Sita goes with him. Sita is taken by Ravana. When Rama rescues Sita he is suspicious that she was unfaithful to him. She proves she was by jumping into fire. Then she gets pregnant. A laundry man hits his wife and says that he does not allow affairs like Rama does. Rama feels disrespected and embarrassed so he asks his brother to take her into the forest and abandon her there. She has twins and teaches them the songs of Rama. Rama hears the twins one day and comes back. However, he still wants Sita to prove her loyalty once again. This time Sita does by reentering mother nature's womb. I based my story off of the movie Brothers. The film is about two brothers: one brother (Sam) is married  to wife (Grace) and has kids but gets deployed, while the other brother (Tommy) is a loner and a troublemaker. When Sam gets deployed he gets taken in as a prisoner from the opposing side. However, Grace believes he is dead. Tommy steps up and starts to act like a family man. Grace and Tommy have an affair, but soon find out that Sam is alive. When Sam comes back he is suspicious about his wife's loyalty. The detailed summary of the plot can be found at Wikipedia. I thought by taking a more modern spin on the story of Rama and Sita, and telling it from "Sita's" point of view would help spice things up. It also shows that constantly testing people can drive them away. I chose this picture because I think it helped create the scene in the park.

Reading Notes: Sita Sings the Blues Part B

The second part of this film did catch me off guard a little. A laundry man beats his wife because he believes she is having an affair. He curses Rama's name and when Rama gets word of this he is furious. He wants his people to respect him and he is now embarrassed about Sita. He has his brother take Sita to the forest and abandon her. She has twins and they sing songs of Rama. Rama hears them and once again wants Sita to prove her loyalty to him

I am very annoyed with Rama. Sita did not ask to get abducted in the first place and she stayed loyal. She also was pregnant with her boys and it makes him heartless for still abandoning her in the forest. This makes me understand why Sita was singing the blues.

I think I want to continue on with my last idea from part A. When Rama comes back he would suspect Sita had an affair with his brother Ravana. She would deny and he would ask her to prove it. She would get the help of the gods to prove it cause she does not want a divorce. She then finds out she is pregnant but not with Rama's baby. At this point she does not know what to do. I want to incorporate mother nature into this somehow since Sita went back into her womb. I am not sure if I want Rama to find out that the boys her not his or not. I am excited to write this next story. I might modernize it or just keep it how it is.

Sita is Pregnant with Rama's Baby 

(Source: Flickr)

Bibliography:

Sita Sings the Blues by Nina Paley: link to reading guide for Film Part B

Reading Notes: Sita Sings the Blues Part A

This film was actually quite interesting. At first I was confused because it is like there are two different movies playing in one film. One is about Dave and Nina which I am assuming is like the Americanized versions of Rama and Sita, so I thought that was pretty interesting.

The film plays pretty closely to original version. It added its twist by Sita singing her blue throughout the film. There is the same plot line however, but it is nice to see it all play out instead of just reading it. The few things that caught my eyes were when Ravana's sister Sita was telling him about Sita she kept describing her like a Lotus Flower. I could not help but just laugh. Just as the original Sita rejects Ravana's advances towards her. Rama sends Sita away because he is unsure what happened between Ravana and Sita. Sita once again proves to him that she is pure by jumping in fire.

When watching the film and hearing a detailed version of this I was thinking about the movie Brothers. It is about about this man who has a wife and kids but he is in the military and goes overseas. While being overseas he is abducted by the enemy and they torture him and fellow platoon. His team is unable to find him and assumes he has died. Back at home they tell his family that he is dead. The man's brother starts to spend a lot of time with the wife. Now, there are two different versions. In one, the wife just kisses the man's brother and that is it, she does not go any further. In the other she acutally particiaptes in intercorse wtih him. What ends up happening is that the man is found and then sent back home. When he gets home he suspects that his wife and brother had an affair and goes crazy.

An idea I have is to base Rama and Sita off of Brothers. For instance I would make Ravana the brother of Rama. When Rama is sent into exile, new would travel back to Sita that he is dead. So I would have Sita have an affair with Ravana because she believes that Rama is dead. When Rama returns Sita would deny it, but.... Well I will write about this story and try to add some plot twists to them. It will be interesting to see what happens.

Sita Singing the Blues

(Source: Reading Guide)

Bibliography:

Sita Sings the Blues by Nina Paley link to reading guide for film Part A