Tuesday, March 28, 2017

Week 9 Storytelling: Honesty is the Best Policy

Kylie and Kendall
(Source: Pixabay)


There once were two best friends. They grew up together and knew each other really well. Their names were Kylie and Kendall. They met when they were both Freshmen in high school. There friendship lasted even though both of them pursed different career paths. Kylie worked as a waitress at Pizza Hut, while, Kendall went on to be a model. Kylie was outgoing and fun. She was the one who was adventurous and willing to take a risk regardless of the cost. However, Kylie was barely making ends meet to live her adventurous life. Kendall on the other hand was very thoughtful and intentional in everything that she did. She spent her money wisely and stuck to a strict budget. One day Kendall was going out of town and needed someone to watch over her condo while she was gone. Kylie offered to help and Kendall was very grateful. 

Kylie was going to stay over at Kendall's apartment to watch the condo, water her plants, and watch her dog. Kylie had only been to Kendall's condo a few times but had never really gotten a chance to see all of it. Kylie was very excited to get a chance to live a lavish life for a few days. However, the lavishness of Kendall's life really got to Kylie and things took a turn for the worse. 

Kylie was awed by all the amazing things that Kendall owned. For instance Kendall owned at least seventy pairs of designer shoes. Her huge walk-in closet was filled with Coach, Prada, and Michael Kors. She had handbags, scarves, hats, dresses, coats, and much more. When Kylie saw her jewelry box she could not believe her eyes. There were so many diamond rings, necklaces, and bracelets Kendall owned. During this state of shock Kylie got a mischievous idea.

She thought,"Why not take some of this for myself? I mean Kendall would not mind. I bet she would hardly notice if anything is gone. She has so much it is not like she’s losing a whole lot. Plus I deserve this! I work so hard and I deserve a break in my life." 

Kylie was dead set on taking some things for herself. Every now and then she would change her mind and tell herself this is was not right, but the more she admired Kendall's things the more she wanted them. Finally, Kylie got a bag and started collecting a few pairs of shoes, some dresses, a scarf or two, a few clutches and handbags, and several diamond earrings and rings. 

A few days later Kendall came back and was delighted to see her friend as well as her condo in one piece. She was so happy that her friend could watch her place that to repay Kylie she told her that she would take her shopping in the next few days. Kylie could barely look at Kendall because of how guilty she felt, but she still went through with it and took some of Kendall's nice things to her home in a large trash bag. Something that Kylie was not aware of was that Kendall had hidden cameras all over her condo. That night Kendall watched the tape and was in complete shock at what her friend was doing. Kendall decided instead of confronting Kylie, she would play a trick on her. 

The next day she took Kylie shopping. Once again, Kylie took advantage of the situation and shopped till she could not shop anymore. Kylie thought she was living the good life. However, when she got home that night she looked at all the nice things Kendall had bought for her and felt extremely guilty. She decided she was going to put all of the things that she stole from Kendall back the next day when Kendall would be at work. Although, that night Kendall had her own plan.

Kendall broke into Kylie's house and took all her things back. Then as the morning came Kylie was terrified because she thought some stranger had come in and stolen the stuff she was supposed to give back to Kendall. Kylie did not know what to do at this point. She immediately went over to Kendall’s place in tears and told Kendall everything. She begged for her forgiveness and said that she was so sorry and would repay Kendall for everything she stole.

Kendall then confessed that she had found out that Kylie had stolen her things. Kylie was shocked and felt ashamed. She told Kylie that she could keep everything that she had bought for her, but never again would she trust her with anything else. From that day forward their friendship was not the same, and Kylie learned that honesty is the best policy.

Bibliography: 

The Giant Crab and Other Tales From Old India by W. H. D. Rouse Reading Part A &B

Author’s note:

In the original story there was man who went on a journey and asked his friend to take his plough till he should return. The man’s friend immediately sold the plough and used the money for his own selfish reasons. When the man came back and asked where his plough went, his friend made up a fake story about how a rat ate it. The man was cleverer and knew his friend stole his plough, so he thought he would play the same trick on him. He took his friend's son out for walk and hid him in his other friend's house. Then he went back and told his friend that the boy got taken by a hawk. In the end the dishonest friend learned his lesson and gave the man his plough back and the man returned the boy. In my story I set the scene for a more realistic story. I had one friend go off on a trip and left the other friend in charge of looking over her condo. The dishonest friend in this story stole her things. The friend returned and saw video footage of her friend stealing her things and therefore decided to play a trick on her friend. In the end the friend learned her lesson and would never steal again.

4 comments:

  1. This was such a great read! I really enjoyed reading the lesson in your story through two best friends. I truly believe honesty is the best policy, and this was the lesson in the original story and yours! I like that you kept this part a theme. I feel any person of any age could read your story, and learn a valuable lesson.

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  2. I like your story. I think it is sweet and has good moral to it. I like the fact you decided to focus your story on the importance of honesty and friendship. I would like to add that if you added more description to your story how much greater your story would turn out to be. There were some parts that felt rushed. You went from speaking about the background of your characters and describing them and then right into the story. Maybe if you added more transitions to your story and more concrete details your story could flow easier and your readers could develop a connection with your characters. The key to any story is being able to keep the reader's attention. The easiest way to do that is by allowing your characters to be relatable and by describing them. If you added more about the characters thoughts and aspirations than the story would have more added substance to it. Overall, your story is creative and insightful. I think this is a great start to what could be a truly remarkable story. Keep going and keep writing and I know it will be great.

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  3. Mehik, I liked how you were able to directly include the summary and description of your portfolio index in your story. You chose a really great tale to make your own, for I feel the object lesson of the story to be honest and have integrity is applicable in all aspects of your life. Furthermore, I really enjoy that your story characters are influenced by the Kardashians as you used the name Kylie and Kendall. It presents a sort of an oxymoron as these two sisters both live lavish lives in reality. Your idea to put them in the story just illustrates how well you were able to modernize your chosen tale. Also, I really like the image you included to relate to the story. It's simple, yet it fits. One small error that I did pick up on was in one life of the first paragraph. You said" She was the one who was adventures." I think you were wanting to say that she was adventurous. Other than this small fix, you did great. I would love to know more about Kylie and to see if she really learned her lesson. You could create a second story about Kylie only.

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  4. This is a great story! You really twisted it to make it something new and unique! I noticed a few grammatical errors so make sure you proofread and spell check, although most were homophones so they are tricky to catch! This story was really entertaining and I liked the moral behind it. It was really cool that you kept the same moral from the original story as well!

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